So There I Was Again (Also Not Very Serious)

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So how long do we have to wait for part 2? We've a girl to get, a wanted agent who is no doubt underground and pissed. It is all here. Now that I think about, it the last 14 pages of this post make a good opening for the real story:D . I am watching you Nightcrawler!!
 
MANY congrats, Nightcrawler, and thanks.

You are not only IN the High Road Hall of Fame, you OWN it.

I am glad I could read someone of such great talent. Your on-the-fly method puts you in a class all by yourself.

I know it takes much time & energy to do this, and hopefully, one day you'll have enough of both to do a sequel.

Very quietly, you became a part of our everyday lives--this was the first thread I checked anytime I came to THR. Thanks, again.

Best wishes on your mid-terms.

Peace,

fiVe
 
Prequel and sequel - within 3 months, right?

Movie rights, anyone?

HBO?

Weekly Reader?

AHA!! - Bumping Blondie from the comics? Dagwood's been working for that old ... for over 30 years... how come he's not retired and on SS?

Well done, son.

-Andy
 
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BRAVO NC!! You have managed a tour de force indeed. My thanks.

I have done some writing and have used your method ... it's a sorta ''ongoing'' deal and you don't have an end until you reach it!!:D I also well know the time involved, believe me!

Great job .. now get back to catching up on all your studies .. having been so kind as to indulge us all.:)



(aside - yeah . if someone could put it all into PDF it'd be a great way to archive it.)
 
I can put it in a PDF if Nightcrawler gives me permission to do so.

I'd need a day or two to find my adobe disc... I never re-installed it after my computer took a big dump.

But yea, just let me know what font/size and any other applicable info
Nick
 
If someone wants to put it into a .PDF, that's fine. But PM me first, I have a couple disclaimers and a copyright notice I want to attach.

I want to remind all future readers that this whole story was written on the fly and in rough draft format, and therefore there are going to be typos and the like. I don't want anyone to think I'm really that sloppy of a writer.

Personally, I can't stand Adobe Acrobat. I hate the program and I hate reading .PDF files; they're a pain in the ass to go through.

I hope the .html links in the story still work, if it's in .pdf format.

Note: Been a couple small edits to the Epilouge, if anyone's interested.
 
Then there's MS Word - which will preserve url's.

If you wish, I can do it in Word - paralleling .PDF.

Your call, NC. PM me w/ material.

-Andy
 
I have it

I already have the whole story in word but I told myself I would only use it for myself unless Nightcrawler said its ok. heres the stats that I have

30,865 words
single spaced
verdena size 10 font
55 pages with margins bumped out .5 inches on both sides
166,012 characters including spaces
2,866 lines

and all in all it is a must read. I'm going to try to add an apendix at the back with screen shots from all the links (which still work in word). I'm a terrible editer otherwise I would volunteer to help edit it.
 
I can e-mail it to you once I'm finished
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That'd be great and there's no hurry. Just be good if you are prepared to let us have copies in the fullness of time.

Two points to make tho ..

1] Be very sure to virus scan a finished file ... .DOC files are amongst many that can carry malicious code, even without you always knowing.

2] Give it the ''Zip'' treatment ... Word gets awful bloated and I remember way back getting 8Mb of Word stuff on a 1.44 floppy ... it compresses down very well .... and so makes download times way smaller.

You done good!:)
 
Mac users....art people...

(Anybody else remember the fireman from Ren & Stimpy? "CIRCUSSSSS MIDGEEETSS....." LOL)

(Sorry to make the connection; the art students here are forced to rent Mac laptops instead of the IBM suck-books that we have. I'm not fond of the vast majority of the art students I've met.)

LOL

Fine. As much as I hate to accomodate a Mac-using ART PERSON, once I'm done with the .doc file somebody can convert it to .pdf. I dont' think the hyperlinks will work, though.

And if .doc and .pdf don't work for you, tough, you Linux freaks are on your own. :evil: Bwhahahahahahaa!!
 
Yeah, I thought this was amazing, rock on, NC. If you consolidate it into another format, I'd like to link to it on my web page, I thought very highly of it.
 
alright, i think NC has had enough pats on his back, now we need to critique it in anticipation of his future stories. i'll start:

lings dialogue leads me to believe that NC has not had much exposure to female companionship, and therefore NC forced the words out for ling. most women i know speak full sentences without stuttering and trying to find the words.

my critique is done. :D
 
most women i know speak full sentences without stuttering and trying to find the words.
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Ling's dialogue is an attempt (however unsuccessful) to reflect her character; she's not an outspoken American girl that forever goes on about her feelings. She's in a bad situation and isn't happy about it; what's worse, she's having to deal with her own pride and ego.

You'll notice that in my first meeting with Ling, she was quite confident of herself, and her speech relected that. After her fall, though, she suddenly was knocked down a BIG notch. That sort of thing is hard on people that are used to being in charge all of the time.

I attempted to imply that the stereotypical "quiet, shy Asian girl" bit Ling was doing a lot of the time was an act on her part, and that she was hiding her true vicious, but conflicted, nature.

Considering I didn't spend any time re-editing the dialogue, though, I can see where that probably didn't come across well. Dialogue is, by far, the weakest point in my writing to begin with.
 
but lings character fell into the trap that movie villains are prone to fall into. when she was able to confront a subdued frenchy, she didnt have her act together. she knew what NC was going to be doing, and she was watching events play out from the dark office, right? so she wouldnt have needed to say things like 'you! ruined my life!"

thats what movie villains do, the talk too much and they go into dramatic motions that are easily countered, as NC countered lings attempt to shoot frenchy.

ling should have came out shooting and not stopped until slide lock. least thats what i would have done. :D


all in all, the story was great, and i do understand it was written on the fly.
 
Well, had she actually shot French, I wouldn't have been able to end the story like I wanted to. Furthermore, it would've gotten her killed.

It was a necessary, if somewhat predictable, plot point, but sacrifices have to be made when you're doing your writing at 3AM and have class/work in a few hours.

Obviously, Ling wasn't that great of a villian; if she had been, she'd have never ended up where she was in the first place. But, characters are only interesting if they change. Ling's half-hearted attempt to kill French was the last "turning point" for her, if you will.

That's not to say everything's all peachy-rosy, and one could probably write another complete story about her simply trying to come to terms with her past, get along now that she's severed ties with the Luminous Path, and trying to survive in a new world.

I agonized over how to deal with Ling. I had another complete plot path cooked up, wherein she'd doublecross me for real, and things would've gotten real ugly, but I decided not to run with it this time.

I had a pretty dramatic scene in mind where the story would prettymuch end with her shooting me in the back, and returning to the Triad.

But that would've been depressing. I know happy endings are passe, and bad endings are sophisticated and artistic (because you know, we're all a bunch of naive fools who need to be reminded that the world is a bad place), but I didn't want to go that way.
 
We're not worthy!!

(looking for the hand-holding-up-flaming-bic smiley...)

WOOOOOO!! Nightcrawler! WOOOOO!!

:D :D :D

Fan-dang-tastic. Waiting to see what you do when you aren't writing "on-the-fly!"

(Oh, BTW...trucks are more than just "sticks." I'd be happy to help with any details involving trucks, motorcycles or beer--three things I'm fairly expert on.)
 
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