"Since the data do not contain appropriate examples for a balanced two-factor design, which would separate density and Brady score"
Give you two guesses how "Brady score" and "population density" correlate, and whether it's stronger than suicide/pop density
. You may want to go back and 'reverse correct' (via anti-log? It's been a while since I did stats) the Brady/Suicide plot to show visually just how random the trendline becomes when controlled for population density.
Make a point of how population density has nothing to do with Brady's policy recommendations (to my knowledge) yet they promote the same curative to all regions of the nation. Make another point of how Brady recommendations largely* have nothing to do with suicide whatsoever in the first place, so the non-correlation makes logical as well as statistical sense.
"You'll find that in rows 63-85, they put "gun deaths" in as one of their inputs, along with "crime guns exported" in lines 87-109. These are not input variables. They are hoped-for outcomes."
Could you explain this further, please? Are they adding 'gun deaths' to raise, or lower, the Brady score of an area? I agree it has nothing to do with scoring the policy choices of an area** which is the whole point of the score, but perhaps explaining how and in what way it twists the data would be telling (I assume it slants it towards rural/low control areas, due to the disproportionate rate of unrelated suicide & the fact that 'gun deaths' are disproportionately suicides). I'd also put this tidbit ahead of the first chart; this adjustment will appear disingenuous if you reveal it
after the eye-charts (heck, I'd put it up where you first refer to the Brady score). I'd also mention how it is a circular-reference, since "crime guns" are so-defined in part by virtue of the local area's gun control laws (assault weapons/NFA/concealed/etc.)
Apart from that, I'd say it's a pretty well thought-out report, devoid of spelling errors
. To be honest, if you suitably mask your findings a little bit in the first half, this would be an interesting document to submit to media/scholarly areas, since it is quite damning & difficult to rebut (without getting into politics/demographics/etc.)
TCB
*In fact none do, but some of their schemes at least purport to reduce suicides by restricting access to firearms
**Assuming for the purposes of their argument that gun control reduces suicides, I suppose you could argue that actual reported gun deaths might be useful in indicating whether an area is actually implanting/enforcing their control scheme, vs. just giving it lip service. I think you'd want something much more nuanced than this adjustment to determine that, however (not to mention one shred of proof that said implementation was related to a demonstrable outcome)